What can you see, hear and smell here?

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    Riya 4m said,

    The Time mechine

    Crash!I landed in the fasanating world of the dinosaurs!I was flabaghasted!A Teradactale flew over my head.It was gigantic.You could hear dinsaurs wrestling each other.It was a dreadfull place to be.The preditor of all the dinasaurs was the T-rex!He was the king of them all.You could see them injured on the floor.Blood was dripping madly from there bodies.They had to fight!If they didn’t they couldn’t survive.Tears were castcading down my face.

    I couldn’t stand seeing the awful site.Even if I couldn’t stand the site,of the dinosaurs getting hurt,I still obsaurved.If that wasn’t awful enough I couldn’t find my time mechine.Suddenly a baby Stegasaurus fell on my feet.It was badly injured.

    Luckly,I had my first-aid kit so I was able to help it.”Ee-ee!”The Stegaurus scretched!It was tring to tell me somthing so I followed it.It led me to my time mechine.”Thankyou,”I said to the Stegasaurus.The baby Stegasaurus waved his tail goodbye!

    That is my story of the time mechine.

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    Kimran said,

    Bang! I unsteadily walked to the wobling door of my time machine. Discombobulated, I realised I myself was in the dinosaur times. My eyes shot upon blood-thirty, feroucious creatures living in this bizzare,harazous world.

    Slowly I crept up to my time machine glancing upon the unknown. All I could see for miles were sand and rock but many imense, terrifying dinosaurs. I tried to be as quiet as a mouse. I crept into my time machine ready for another adventure, hopefully not one with… Guess? The dinosaurs, which are bloodcurdling on the outside and in the inside they are intimidating.

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    Kimran said,

    Riya I wish you would use SNOT(show not tel) because it will make your work better.

    So oif you said I was terrifyed you could say a shiver of fear glided down my spine.

  4. 4

    Riya 4m said,

    Ok kimran.I will remember that.

  5. 5

    Well done girls. These are brilliant descriptions. I will share them with the class on Monday.

  6. 6

    Riya said,

    I wish more pepole will write on the blog and remember your CLAFS!

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