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Here is a link to Shawon’s writing from Friday. . Please leave Shawon a comment to let him know the things that have been successful in his writing and so give him some top tips to help him improve. Enjoy!
Remember- you can leave an audio comment or a written comment. Click on the link to see the voice thread in full size because you won’t be able to read the writing here.
http://voicethread.com/share/1722165/
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jfb57 said,
February 9, 2011 @ 5:56 pm
Can’t get to hear this I’m after. Says I need permission. I’ll see if I can sign up for anaccount!
year5atbearwood said,
February 9, 2011 @ 6:20 pm
Sorry- have changed viewing permissions now. You should be able to view.
Mr Maloney said,
February 10, 2011 @ 7:34 am
Wow Shawon, I was really impressed with your writing. You chose some super words and I loved the description of Mickey’s nemesis!
Keep up this writing and you’ll be a published author in no time! Nice job.
Mr Maloney
Nina Mora Bosch said,
February 10, 2011 @ 11:44 am
Hello, class!
I really liked Shawon’s WOW work.
I feel a bit strange commenting this on the blog because you did this writer’s workshop whilst I was with you, in your class.
Keep on doing marvellous pieces of writing!
Miss you all,
Nina
Bismah said,
February 10, 2011 @ 8:34 pm
Thank you Neena for writing on our blo
Bismah said,
February 10, 2011 @ 8:43 pm
Thank you Neena for writing on our blog!We miss you too!It’s nice to hear from you because you used to be with year 4 but now your in spain and your still remembered us so thank you very much!!! 😛
Nina Mora Bosch said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:24 am
You’re welcome 😉 Of course I think of you!!
mya said,
February 13, 2011 @ 5:17 pm
Yes Bismah, Its really nice to hear from Nina again. Hope your well Nina, thanks for looking at our blog.
shawon said,
February 16, 2011 @ 8:08 pm
Thanks Nina :).
yasmin said,
February 10, 2011 @ 2:02 pm
Well done this is brill and am from another school.
From Yasmin.
shawon said,
February 10, 2011 @ 9:00 pm
Thank you everbody for commenting on my work.
rhion said,
February 11, 2011 @ 9:47 am
shawon I relly like your work its fantastik how did you do it?
Anthony T said,
February 11, 2011 @ 9:52 am
how old are you?were do you live?I realy like your work.what is your name?.
rhion said,
February 11, 2011 @ 9:55 am
I relly like your work shawonhow did you do it?
tiaw said,
February 11, 2011 @ 9:57 am
I like my school, do you like yours?
lennon said,
February 11, 2011 @ 10:10 am
hello its lennon you asked me to leave you a message what is your favourite lesson is it math becuse math is my favourite.
Cameron H said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:03 am
Brilliant absolutly brilliant I am Cameron hendy and I am From Leamore Primary School
Rachel G said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:05 am
Hello my name is Rachel and I am from Leamore Primary School I was just wrighting to say that I really like your peice of writin it was really good.
brandon k said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:06 am
hello my names brandon k what team do you suport I suport manchester united
brandon k said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:08 am
Hello my name is Brandon and I am from Leamore Primary School I was just wrighting to say that I really like your peice of writin it was really good.
Chad A said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:11 am
keep up with the good work it is really good brill :d
Emily E said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:08 am
Wow! I really love your work io could read it again and again again.
Jordan S said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:08 am
Hi my name is Jordan and I am from leamore primary school and I like your work well done
brandon h said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:08 am
Hi my name is brandon h what team do you surp
Chad A said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:09 am
i really like the work your school has produced keep up the good work i will look forward to seeing more work.
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:09 am
Hi my name is Olivia i really liked your work
Demi c said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:10 am
Hello my name is Demi c I am from leamore primary school I like your writing 🙂
Cameron H said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:10 am
Brilliant absolutly brilliant I am Cameron H and I am From Leamore Primary School
Emily W said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:10 am
Hello, my name is Emily. I’m from Leamore Primary School. I really this diary entry. Please will you visit our blog.
Charlotte E said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:11 am
I love the work youv’e done it’s great i could read it again and again.
danielle said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:11 am
This is really good my name is Danielle and im from Leamore primary school. 🙂
paige j said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:11 am
Hello my name is paige I am a studnt in leamore primary school just wanted to say I realy like all of your costumes an I can tell you have put a lot os effort into them well done 😀
brandon k said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:12 am
we have been learning about world war 11
Jordan S said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:12 am
Who do you suport I suport Liverpool:)
brandon h said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:12 am
Hi my name is brandon h what team do you surport I surport manu:)
Chad A said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:13 am
please visit our blog we have a lot in store for you enjoy chadxx
Demi c said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:14 am
Hi my name is Demi c I like your writing well done 🙂
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:15 am
Hi my name is Olivia i come from Leamore Primary school
paige j said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:16 am
good job
connor said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:16 am
Hello Im connor my nickname Is c.j brandon I suport Aston Villa
Jordan S said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:16 am
Do you ever travel abroad I have I have been to Spain, Germany and France 😦
Chad A said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:16 am
pleas sent emails
Emily W said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:17 am
Hi my name is Emily and I like your work.
Demi c said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:17 am
Welldone
Jordan S said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:17 am
Do you ever travel abroad I have I have been to Spain, Germany and France 🙂
paige j said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:17 am
i like your work
Emily W said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:17 am
Hi my name is Emily and I really like your work
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:17 am
what have you been learning about
Demi c said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:18 am
Good job
Emily W said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:18 am
Hi my name is Emily and I love your work.
Jordan S said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:18 am
How old are you I am 10 years old (*)
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:18 am
what is your best subject
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:19 am
we have been learning about world war 2
Jordan S said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:19 am
How old are you I am 10 years old. (*)
danielle said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:19 am
This is brilliant wow I carnt stop reading it.
Emily W said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:19 am
Hi my name is Emily and I absolutley love your work.
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:20 am
i liked your work
Jordan S said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:20 am
I am 10 years old how old are you (*)
Demi Johnson said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:20 am
Hello my name is Demi and i really liked your piece of wiriting i could read it again and again.
Emily W said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:20 am
Hi I’m Emily and I really love your work. I can’t wait to see some more.
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:21 am
go on our blog we have a lot of work on it
danielle said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:22 am
were learning about world war 2 its really interesting
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:22 am
my name is Olivia. I am 10 years old
Olivia B said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:23 am
what is your favourite football team
paige j said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:23 am
love the costumes
Emily E said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:26 am
I really like it well done. 🙂
connor said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:27 am
i like the comentes
Emily E said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:28 am
Well done i am jelous of all the work i wish i could work up to your standards.
Emily E said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:29 am
Wow every thing is so cool it is looks so complicated.
Emily E said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:29 am
It is so cool well done. 🙂
jordan said,
February 11, 2011 @ 11:55 am
my favourite n lesson is ict.
What is yours?
Meharpal said,
February 14, 2011 @ 8:41 pm
wow this writing is really good. keep it up.