The Match Attack Gang by Shawon

Prologue

“BOOM BOOM BOOM!!!” My footsteps thundered down the corridor away from the crime scene…
The little voice inside my head was thinking everybody was scrutinising me because I was a thief now. Well… If you want to hear about it then listen carefully.

Chapter 1
It all started when a ‘Match Attax Gang’ was made in school. You could only be in the gang by having the full Match Attax collection. This was nearly impossible for a kid like me whose mom who wouldn’t buy me a single packet.
“Oh mum please I want a match attax card”. I moaned as mom put the shopping away in the kitchen. “This is just unfair everybody’s got one why can’t I?”
“Oh Shawon stop moaning I’ve told you a million times that it’s too expensive. Replied mom in an exasperated tone
“Fine if you don’t buy me one then I’ll have to do something by myself.” I muttered. The next day at school it got worse and worse. In the dinner queue the match attax gang were showing off their match attax card and I felt miserable and overlooked. At art time everybody was painting ‘My favourite story’ one of my friend John Williams who had a match attax card was my partner. I painted Horrid Henry and John Williams painted Little Red Riding Hood. John Williams thought he would be in trouble but he got away with it.

Final chapter
I went to the toilet to wash my hands suddenly… I saw John Williams match attax. Unspotted, unspotted, unseen I picked up the match attax album and hid it in my coat when it was home time. I rapidly ran home before mom came back from work when I opened my coat but suddenly it was empty.
“Oh no it’s gone what if someone saw it drop I’ll be dead meat!” When mom came back home guess what she brought me the match attax collection. Uh-oh what if I bring it to school people will think that it’s John Williams match attax collection so I told mom that I want to go upstairs so I threw the match attax collection in next doors garden. The next day at school it was assembly by the head teacher what if the assembly was about the stolen match attax album. Luckily it was actually about that the school football team has won the premier league. And I found out that I actually put John Williams match attax collection in his own coat. “Some fool just put my match attax album in my own coat” said John Williams. I learnt my lesson. I promise will never steal again.

Star: I liked your detail.
Wish: I think you could up level it marked by Karolina.

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17 Responses so far »

  1. 1

    Mrs Skinner said,

    This is really good Shawon because the setting is one that lots of young people will be able to understand so your message will get through!

  2. 2

    shawon said,

    Thank you Mrs Skinner Miss martindale also liked the proulouge part.

  3. 3

    mya said,

    Wow! shawon what an amazing story, I love your use of vocabulary.

  4. 5

    Rayan said,

    your story is fantastic.

  5. 6

    paiges said,

    Shawon I really enjoy your opener it is fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 🙂

  6. 8

    zara said,

    Shawon your story is great you used some great vocabluary I liked the word scrutinising , exasperated!!!!!!! You tried really hard!!!!! You used some great ly words:
    rapidly , suddenly , carefully , luckily , and many more. I like the prolouge it was intersting !!!!!!!!!!

    “BOOM BOOM BOOM!!!” My footsteps thundered down the corridor away from the crime scene…
    The little voice inside my head was thinking everybody was scrutinising me because I was a thief now. Well… If you want to hear about it then listen carefully. 🙂 🙂 🙂 😦 😦 😦 😉 😉 😉 😛

  7. 9

    umann said,

    i really liked your prlogue and your final chapter 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂

  8. 10

    sabina said,

    shawon I really enjoy your opener it is fantastic…..!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)

  9. 13

    cameron said,

    i love your vocabulary shawon. :0

  10. 14

    mya said,

    Shawon you used some loads of detail, well done.

  11. 15

    emiliana :) said,

    wow shawon it was rely interesting 🙂

  12. 16

    Ryan said,

    That was an amazing story and your vocabulary was awesome. :):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)::):):):):):):):):):)::):):):):):):):

  13. 17

    Ryan said,

    That was an amazing story and your vocabulary was awesome. 🙂


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