Here are the first drafts of Max, Sana, Udeshpal and Chloe’s Mermaid Tale. They would really love your feedback so that they know what elements you think are effective in their writing, but also some advice about how they could improve. Think carefully about your comment. What can they do to improve their writing? They will use your feedback to help them improve their stories next week. Please click the link to leave your feedback. Remember this can be an audio comment or a written target.
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shawon said,
July 15, 2011 @ 4:27 pm
I liked your question also I like the word unappreciated max.
aiza said,
July 21, 2011 @ 11:16 am
i agree shawon you are right 🙂
karolina said,
July 18, 2011 @ 12:14 pm
Shawon i agree with you but i think there are more things max has really worked hard on.
aiza said,
July 21, 2011 @ 11:10 am
i agree with you karolina
Paige! said,
July 18, 2011 @ 6:04 pm
Wow! you have all put alot of effort into this storys there so amazing!!!!!!!
aiza said,
July 21, 2011 @ 11:23 am
i agree paige
aiza said,
July 21, 2011 @ 1:00 pm
i really enjoyed reading your work i think it was fantastic i like your wonderful wow words i think you have tried very, very hard well done :-):-):-)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PAIGE! said,
July 21, 2011 @ 12:12 pm
I agree Aiza reading there work makes me wan`t to read on becuase I want to know what happens!!!!!!!